Regrets

[bunn]

Regrets  : 2544 words, Gen.  Curufin, in the Halls of Mandos, does his homework.

Five pages of regrets, written in a language no-one knows. I’ll parcel them up and give them to the Maiar of Mandos. Who knows? Perhaps I will have bought a little of my father’s time, which like his Silmarils is stolen from him and held by others who have no right to claim it.

Comments

[bunn.livejournal.com]

Curufin is certainly distinctive -- though I ended up liking him more after writing this, oddly, than I did before.

There is no dialogue in 'Regrets', so I wonder if that is what makes the difference in the language feeling 'elvish'? I think my dialogue tends to be more colloquial, and I tend to use contractions, which perhaps read as a little more modern : 'I'll' rather than 'I will'.

I may experiment with avoiding them, and see what that does...

[r-blackcat.livejournal.com]

Oh. I'll try to pay atention to dialogues\monologues while reading your fics.
I somehow think "I will"/"I'll" is not what works for me... But maybe some other contractions?